Dear diary
I know it was wrong to open my sisters box. But I had to see what was inside.
I hope she doesn’t reads this. In the box there was money. So I bought a pool and put it in the room to make an in door pool. but at the Bottom Of the box I found a note It said
Dear Secret box
I have started A job at the hot dog shop I’m saving my money for a gift for my little sister. I hope she doesn’t spend this money because I stayed up all night to get the money.
I felt really guilty🥺 so I will return the pool and get her money.
Hi Lily!
This was a really nice story. In your future stories, you can use some more punctuation but otherwise, I really enjoyed this. I enjoyed how the story had many twists and turns. Great ending!
I like how you told the story using a diary and a note. It helps make the plot twist seem more surprising, I think. Good work, Lily!