2/11/20
BOOM! CRASH! This massive bee is rampaging through the city. I’m scared this could be the end of the world. It’s been 2 days since the bee has rampaging through thee city and so far my best idea was to get a bunch of nectar to try to tame it so I snuck around the city and found a lot of nectar until I found the bee right at my feet. It some how asked me a question. Can you build my colony, It’s been destroyed. I said the whole world can help. After 4 years bees and humans work together and let people discover new things about them.
Hey Rocco,
We really like your story. Esspically, the start where you used onomatopoeia.(BOOM!CRASH!)
Your ending was very optimistic which ended on a happy note.
Thanks
Erika & Michelle
Melbourne Australia
Hi Rocco good story i like your onomatopoeia keep up the good work🤙🏽
Try to keep your story in context.Otherwise good job and make your sentences have more context because in your sentence it had I found alot of necter try saying how who found the necter.😁